After reading
Don't Look Behind You, give me your review of the story. Out of 5 stars, how many stars would you give it and why? What elements of suspense did it have? Don't forget to bring your ID cards on Tuesday, we will be checking out the novel Frankenstein.
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ReplyDeleteI would rate this story 4/5 because although it is a good story, it's not amazing. The events in the story are easy to visualize, as they are described shortly and to the point. The foreshadowing hints at possible events and outcomes and keeps you reading to find out. I found it interesting how Justin is actually the narrator, but describes the old Justin as a seemingly separate character, showing the new Justin reborn as a crazy killer. I found the run-on sentences annoying and sometimes confusing, but one could argue that it adds to Justin's twisted-minded character. The most suspenseful part of the story is towards the end, because it makes you anxious as you are supposedly about to be killed. I am obviously alive as I type this, so I guess the story is a bunch of balognEIBFOG'SFVHUHIBOVAIUHOIFHVLJVVGGYEIBV.
ReplyDeleteI agree with you Jorelle. The story overall was good, but not amazing to the point where I would say "Oh wow!"
DeleteI also agree that the events were easy to visualize but could have been organized better.
DeleteThis story is a bunch of A(SDFJ!@I$!O@$J since I'm not dead. I TOTALLY agree when you state that you visualize the story in your mind while reading it diligently. The reincarnation of Justin put me in shock since Justin was just a printer in Ohio then ending up as a killer.
DeleteI would rate this story 3/5 because it is okay. I think it could have been better if the person telling this story would actually organize the events better. I was understanding the point of the story until I got to when Justin was with Harley after being left in the swamp? I don't know, but overall the story was really interesting I have to say. I liked how Justin became really sneaky and clever with killing people, to me it seemed as Justin was going crazy. The most suspenseful part of this story was at the end, I do have to agree with Jorelle because it got me thinking and scared that I actually looked around to see if there was anyone watching and I didn't want to go in the room by myself anymore. As of right now, I'm not really scared.. not as much, but I don't believe in this nonsense.
ReplyDeleteI got confused at the swamp part too. I was pretty sure Justin was dead but then he was alive?
DeleteYeah I think that the part where Justin is revealed as the narrator could have been written a little better.
DeleteI would rate this story 3 out of 5 because it was a good story about how the mind of a serial killer works. However, everything was short and not very descriptive. I did think it was interesting how Justin went from being a normal person to being a serial killer. I was really confused about who the narrator was. I didn't figure it out that it was Justin until the end of the story. I didn't like the end, because I knew that nobody was behind and I wouldn't be killed. The most suspenseful part was the end, because Justin makes it seem like he's about to kill you.
ReplyDeleteI also think it was interesting how he described how he transformed into a serial killer and each time stating his cleverness. I also didn't like the ending even though he does make it sound suspenseful.
DeleteI would rate this story 3/5 because the beginning did grab my attention a bit, but after a while the story seemed less interesting. Also near the end, it sounded like Harley was dead & Justin was too crazy to get Harley's deaf through his dead. This lead me to believe that Justin was betting himself the whole time. The most suspenseful part of the story was the ending because the narrator, Justin, made it pretty clear that he could be anywhere near you waiting to win his own bet. Overall, the story was okay to me because it was about a crazy serial killer and his story. Also he was able to get readers to read the whole story by adding foreshadowing details throughout his narrative and ending his story with how he started.
ReplyDeleteI definately agree with you Soledad because I also thought that Harely was dead, and that he was simply a figment of Jusin's imagination. I also thought that the most suspenseful part of the story was the ending.
DeleteI would rate this story 4/5 because the story was a good suspenseful thriller, that had me wanting to read more. As Jorelle stated the story was able to make me visualize a picture in my head of what was happening in the story. It's interesting how we see a normal person evolve into a crazy serial killer. The most suspenseful part of the story was at the end, because Justin is telling you how he's about to kill you, as you finish the story.
ReplyDeleteI would give this story 4/5 because it was very suspenseful. The very beginning caught my interest, but as the story went on I began to lose interest until it was near the end. I thought it was interesting how Justin started to get crazy and he became a killer. The end had the most suspense, and the end made me feel anxious even though I knew I wasn't going to get killed.
ReplyDelete"Don't Look Behind You" was an OK story but could have been better so I rate it a 3/5. From the starting point and the crazy "you will die" idea really caught my attention, but when the story started describing the characters and how they met it was losing my attention. What I really liked is how Justin went from being the hunted to being the hunter killing anyone in his path. Overall the most suspenseful part of the story was the end because you just read how he killed people and that you were next no matter were you are...
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DeleteI would give this story a 3/5 for various reasons. First of all, I really enjoyed the beginning and the ending because they were very suspenseful. I really liked the foreshadowing in the beginning because it made me wonder and want to keep reading. I also enjoyed the fact that the author was "talking" to me and made me a part of the story. However, I felt like the author lost my interest throught the part that he explained Justin's background because it was very dull. I went from being fully captivated and a little scared to utterly bored within a page turn.
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ReplyDeleteThis story was quite intertesting from begining to end eventough the middle has some trouble when intoducing the characters.One thing that was interesting to me was how Justin really believed that Harley was alive. Another thing that I also liked was how in the end it makes it seem as if he was really talking to you, specifically, and no one else. That is why i would rate it a 3.5 out of 5.
ReplyDeleteI would rate this story a 4 out of 5 because I enjoyed reading the story. I enjoyed reading the story because I liked how the author set up the plot. The most suspenseful moment in the story was in the end because Justin was talking directly at you how he was going to kill you. Even though I did not fell intimidated at all.
DeleteI agree with you Briselda about finding interesting the part of Justin actually believing Harley was alive.
DeleteI thought this story was pretty good for my first time reading a story like this one,written directly to the reader.I'd rate it a 3 out of 5 because it had interesting parts but they a little confusing.Such as the part where Justin sees Harley again when he had already been dead.The mostly suspenseful part of the story was at the end because it did get me thinking i was going to be the next one to be killed.Overall, I didn't get me all scared because I was laughing about it.
ReplyDeleteI would rate this story 4 out of 5 since the story had great use of suspense in the beginning and at the end which got me MINDBLOWNED!Overall this story isn't considered to be the best, but it had peoples mind going throughout the whole story. I was quite curious when Harley died during the story which got Justin hallucinating when he was in the swamp. Hearing Harleys voice/visions supposedly made Justin a serial killer. As I was finishing up the story I felt threatened while reading it as Jason told the reader that he'll kill you in the least expected places. This story stuck out to most stories since most stories end with happy endings, but this story is a death note which I found really nice since the story has its own originality. ~ Rashed Santiago
ReplyDeleteI would rate the story 2 out of 5, not only because it seemed as though the narrator was trying too hard to convince the reader of being the likely target of Justin, but also for its questionable events. For example, how quickly Harley was able to conspire a plan to use Justin's hand skills to conterfeit currency, and Justin being tortured to near death being left at a swamp miraculously found by a still-living Harley ect. Though I have to admit, the style in which this story was written is highly original and helps to inspire those with potential for originality. The only reason I did not give it a 1 or a 0 is because it is well written and was an interesting read especially after hours. Plus, Justin's insanity hooked me.
ReplyDeleteThis story was really interesting and I'd rate this 4/5 stars. This story was really great because it gave good details which made visualizing the events as they occurred and it made it much more easier to comprehend. The author kept the story very intense but somehow confused me when justin became the bad guy of the story.
ReplyDeleteThis Story was very interesting ,but very poorly described by the author so I would give it a 3/5. This story was very confusing at some parts such as when they he was at the swamp with Harley becuase I thought he had already been killed so that was a surprise. Honestly I liked how the author actually made me think that he was actually coming for me during the whole story. I always had a picture during the whole story, but I didn't like what I was thinking. The most suspensful part was at the very end of course.
ReplyDeleteI'm pretty sure it's going to publish,but just checking.
ReplyDeleteI give it a 5/5 because it actually made me look at my window when I was reading it.
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